tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-305831030640767919.post3530817769350629568..comments2024-02-28T16:52:58.782-08:00Comments on Totally random but...: Practical Magic...4Denisehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15606447576154396680noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-305831030640767919.post-26503706771782575692012-10-02T19:22:52.183-07:002012-10-02T19:22:52.183-07:00Thanks! I worked it over a few times and gave up. ...Thanks! I worked it over a few times and gave up. :-) I'll steal your rework of it tomorrow when I'm back on the PC. Denisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15606447576154396680noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-305831030640767919.post-78581424094267658792012-10-02T18:33:42.588-07:002012-10-02T18:33:42.588-07:00I like the character developments happening.
If I...I like the character developments happening.<br /><br />If I might make one suggestion. I had to read the first line twice. Maybe switching it around?<br /><br />"When Cal and Deeds first announced to their family and friends they planned to marry..."<br /><br />It cold just be me, but my brain had to work to make sense out of it the first time.Davinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11298796302132283820noreply@blogger.com